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take me away from evil
take me away from pain
take me away from this world
that truly lies in vein
capture my sole and give it to another
who will appreciate
and enjoy the life like no other
i was a mistake
that i was told
no reason to mold
no one to trust
no one to belive
no one to comit to
no one to deside
sixteen years of wasted life
and wasted breth
now i shall move on
to a much brighter depth.
©2004-2009 ~CrimsonTearsOfBlood
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:icongutterpansy:
nice, i like this alot. I mean, it's not incredible but it's good.
:iconin-tempest:
Very good..... Is that an original picture?....

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Without Rain, nothing could be cleansed. Without Fire, nothing could be valuable. Without Wind, nothing could fly. Without Creativity, nothing would be pleasurable. And without the Soul, nothing would matter.
:iconcrimsontearsofblood:
no i got it off of google :(
:iconin-tempest:
ahhh.. you should try to make some of your own.... it will make your stuff more original.........

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Without Rain, nothing could be cleansed. Without Fire, nothing could be valuable. Without Wind, nothing could fly. Without Creativity, nothing would be pleasurable. And without the Soul, nothing would matter.
:iconcrimsontearsofblood:
lol that is the next big step thnx again for the advice
:iconmissy-star:
take me away from evil
take me away from pain
take me away from this world


yes, TAKE ME AWAY!

I like the rhythm of your poem, and the reptition of some lines. ;) :)
good work!

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a nifty Moderator of ~ PoetsoftheNight
******don’t let the words bite ******
:iconcrimsontearsofblood:
thank you u r so0o0o sweet :hug:
:iconmissy-star:
:hug:

sweetness is like a flower
with petals of pure white
put the flower in a vase
and sweetness all day and night!

-emily

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a nifty Moderator of ~ PoetsoftheNight
******don’t let the words bite ******

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